Hello So i write alot, and im not sure whether or not to toss out this story idea. Heres the opening i wrote so far. Im open to all opinions. Thanks :)!

His eyes are breathtaking. I had always been hypnotized by that calm, glistening sea of gray, and the way that sea almost became an emerald green in the warm sunlight and a dark shade of blue under the glow of the stars. I always had to look away from his staring gaze, with fear that I would get lost in his eyes forever. I will never forget the way his eyes sparkled each and every time he revealed his handsome smile, or the way the sunlight danced around the dark curls in his hair. Each freckle across his nose and cheeks were perfectly placed, as if God himself positioned them on his gorgeous face one by one. Whenever he placed his hand in mine I felt as if anything was possible. In being with him, I finally understood the concept of “Love Conquers All”. Not once before have I ever felt so protected when I was wrapped compassionately in his arms. His full, pink lips were soft to the touch when pressed against my own. At times I dared to think that those lips were like those of an angel’s. Along with that first angelic kiss came a rush of incredible, unforgettable emotions, ones that I will cherish for eternity. The attraction, both physically and emotionally between us both, was inevitable. During our most intimate meetings, when his body pressed gently against mine, an indescribable and what seemed like an unrealistic bliss poured into my heart and soul. He had taken me out of my normal reality, and showed me a world I had never known, but always yearned to explore. That world expeditiously became everything I had imagined, and more. I loved him unconditionally since first glance across the moonlit room. It was then when he promised me he would love me always. With trembling lips and nervous hands, I promised the same for him, and we traded hearts. He was my first love, and I was ultimately determined to make him my only love, my forever.
It does sound cliche. I honestly dont like it at all. It doesnt seem right to me.

and ive never ever read a twilight book. ever. lol. so my inspiration did not come from that.