“No.” It wasn’t a statement, it was a command to stay away. There was no chance I would leave this to himself.
“James,” I began, more determination in my voice then before, “You need me.”
“I wouldn’t be able to stand it if you got hurt,” he looked away, real pain in his eyes. Guilt overwhelmed me as I thought of the last time I had not listened to his warning.
“I won’t get hurt this time,” I promised him. I wasn’t sure if it was mostly for him or for myself.
“I won’t let you put yourself in danger like this, what would happen if I lost you? Eva, I can’t live with that.” Emotion choked his voice, and I felt the prickling of tears burn in my eyes.
Over in the distance there was a far away shore of glistening white sand and water that was so pure that you could not tell where the sky met the horizon, and the crystal waves would crashed against the rocks, scattering pretty white shells all around. The clouds would move over it all, watching from its high post over all of the lands. Gulls and sea-birds would scavenge for food while the crabs hid in their armour, ready for the attack, claws snapping at the beaks as they nosed their ways in.
The sheer blue would turn from light to brilliant colors of many shades of pink and golds, casting a warm yellow glow across the fields of wheat and grass. Stars would peak from behind the curtain of day and step into the stage of night, the stars pin points of light in the darkness. All of this would happen in time, even with me gone. Even if I left this world, time would move on, and so would its people as it fell prey to that very same time, and life would go on as it should.
It would not if I lost him.
“All that matters,” I breathed, slowly winding my arms around his perfect body and into the warm fingers that instantly curled around mine. My gaze enveloped itself in his perfect sky blue eyes as he stared back at me, the same sense of concern that must have reflected in mine. “Is that I love you.”
We gripped eachother and held the other close in a rough moment, and as his hands entertwined in my hair, his lips brushed against the top of my head, barely whispering loud enough to hear.
“As I you, my love.”
It felt like the last time we would embrace like this, and with sorrowful tears running down our cheeks, we prepared to face what would be our biggest challenge yet.
Leaving the other to die, while at the same time fighting for both of our lives.
All we could do was wonder how the fates would play out.

(Thats like, a thing that would be an "inside peak" like when you look on the back of the book or on a page inside the cover or something.)

Its not much of a thing to read, most people like, give fifty paragraphs for people to critic, but this little excerpt just about sums up what all of my writing appears to be. Obviously, there are different levels. Normally I wouldn’t intro a detail every time someone said something in a typical conversation.

heres a summary…(fyi, the story isn’t based on earth)

Eva was a typical young adult growing up with her father in the desolate forests of Xscalia, but that all changes when mysterious robbers appear in the night and rip apart all that she knows and loves.

Accidently stowing away on a Lorasion-bound ship heading back from Xscalia to her real home planet, the prince discovers her hiding in the far corner of the ship.

This is the beginning of their story. Prince James Carlisle of Lorasia and Eva Rosalia embark on a mysterious journey full of magic, friendship, and trust. In the end, she may even find love where she leasts expects it.

But there is a traitor hiding in the darkness. He knows, he watches, he’s waiting for his moment.

Will Eva find the strength to save the Prince? Or will he fall prey to the one person he would expect?

uh, yeah. anyways, please rate or critic my idea on the story, if I should maybe follow through with it or just have it as a story-out-of-hobby thing. im seventy pages in out of 170, should i continue?